That mysterious girl! - A short story by rahul.stan

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· @rahul.stan · (edited)
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That mysterious girl! - A short story
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She was standing in the hallway. From where I was standing I could only see her hair. She had hair as black as coal with a stroke of pink on some of the middle strands. And then she turned. Her face was fair and her cheeks a little fluffy. But she was slim.

When I saw her, my heart skipped a beat or two. I had never laid my eyes on someone so beautiful. It was like a dream. I couldn't move. I couldn't blink. I just started at her angelic face.

What was just a few seconds felt like an eternity. It felt as if there were only the two of us and no one else. The crowd of people standing there seemed to disappear.

Suddenly she went forward and went ahead. I snapped back to reality. I ran towards her but soon she disappeared into the crowd.

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## Just an attempt at writing a story.

# If you guys like it, give it a vote and follow me for more AWESOME posts!
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@borisb95 ·
great story :) You have a new follower. I will appriciate it if you follow me too :))
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@rahul.stan ·
If you had left a better comment not just hoping to get a follow from me, I would have appreciated it a lot :)
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@nilim ·
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great brother..keep going
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@rahul.stan ·
Thank you.
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@insteadofmoney ·
Desperate for love ?
Great men, just great for attempt !
=]
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@rahul.stan ·
>Desperate for love ?

Its just a story attempt. -_-

From next time onwards if you don't have anything good to say, then don't :)
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@insteadofmoney ·
Did I offend you ?
I think not !
Do not like criticism ?
Then you should not post them...AWESOME posts!

First of all, I did not say any think about you.
Second, my comments is for hero of your story attempt.
And 
Third, yes he is "Desperate for love" !
If he had someone to love he would not behave like that.
I can go on about "story attempt"....

But I will not.
I just left a first comment that "your attempt is great" 
But you did not like it =]
 You are to emotional my friend !
=]
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@varunsangwan ·
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It's not just a attempt you nailed it.
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@rahul.stan ·
Haha..Thanks brother :)
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@aishwarya ·
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Nice writing ;) Keep it up!
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@rahul.stan ·
Thank you so much! :)
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@randowhale ·
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@rahul.stan ·
If the owner is reading this. Maybe you should lay off for a day or two. Your voting power is down to 30%
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@binoddahal · (edited)
Except for 3 little mistakes, every thing is exceptional..... Your writing skill is brilliant .. Present the story in a very excellent manner... Like it bro.. upvoted....
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@rahul.stan ·
Can be a little more specific on the mistakes?
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@binoddahal ·
yes.....3 paragraph....
 Was is replaced with  were 
 eternity replaced with an or the
 eternity is marked by ?
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@binoddahal ·
May be ... ???? i am not sure
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