THE FINAL GOODBYE : A piece of writing by thatindianlady

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THE FINAL GOODBYE : A piece of writing
I always wanted to write, also the reason i joined steemit. I mostly write narrative stories putting a bling of my wild imagination. I write mostly in contest posts, but then i wanted to write for myself too. I needed time and a story beggining from my mind, no storychain, no contest theme, something i start and end, so here i go :


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<h2> THE FINAL GOODBYE</H2>



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It was very bright, a jolt of pain in the back of my head, awaken me up. I sit up frightened, trying to recall the last thing before this, but I couldn’t. My pupils adjusted to the lights I look around, it was empty room looked rather old, but I am sure I have never been here, with no windows or even a door which I could see, I was sitting on a bed, somewhat like those in hospitals, I experienced just a sheet upon me and nothing else, and a monitor beside me creating a repeated low pitch sound. “Am I Dead?” I thought. Suddenly I heard a creaking metal door sound from behind me, I attempted to turn behind I saw a heavy figure entering the room.

Twenty-Five Minutes Before:

“Amour, where is my wallet?”, said Duke, “I don’t know must be beside the night lamp”, answered a rather sweet voice from the kitchen.

“I couldn’t find it, help me will you?” said Duke

“You are such a baby!” Amour answered in an irritated tone

“And that’s why you loved me,” said Duke Kissing Amour.

They said their farewells, and Duke leaves the home.

Present:

The shadow closed in, I couldn’t have made out who he was but looked older, quite tall with clean hair and a well-cut beard, he was wearing a well-groomed suit. He closed on, sat on a stool beside the bed, it was odd, I didn’t see that stool there before. With a bass voice, he asked me “How are you, Duke? Does your head still hurt”, I didn’t know what to say I whispered in a depressed tone, “Do I Know You? and what is this place?”. He smiled at me and said, “Don’t you recall? “. I strained to remember the events of today, the foremost affair that came to my mind was the expression of my love, Amore with the smile, waving at me from the balcony of our apartment, I panicked and asked, “Where is Amour?”. The man replied, “She is well.” Now I was certain I was dead and this is what the afterlife looks like, though I didn’t want to know, I asked the man, “Am I dead?”, He laughed and said “Not yet”.

 

Fifteen Minutes Before:

I was in my car, already late for work, I had a meeting with the Chinese delegation at 11:30. “It is already 11:23, I will never make in time”, I thought. I increased my speed in absolute despair. While crossing the local super-mart, and I picked up from the recess of my eye a girl around five or six in bright pink, trying running towards the road not five feet away from me, I was too tight and I panicked, I took a hard left only to lose control of the car and colliding with the pavement. I could just make sense of the pain in my head. I looked around to examine the girl if she is okay, but only I could see was few distance figures closing in before it all confused out.

Present:

“Is the girl alright?”, I asked, the man got a subtle smile and said, “She is fine.”. Now I was quite certain I was stagnant, the thing hit me, the first thing that came to my mind was the smiling face of my wife, Amour. And tears rolled down my eyes, I ranted to the men beside me,” But I am only 28 years old, I can’t die. I am too young to die”, I gasped “I have a wife”. The men beside me sat silently, I go on raving for more or less time, but in depth, I knew it won’t change, “I am dead”. I cried for a bit, and the men waited quietly, I asked him, “You said I am not dead yet”. He stated “Yes, I am here to grant you a final wish before you die”, I thought to myself “That’s stupid! Why will I ask for a final wish if I die after that,” said nothing out loud, only somehow the men read my mind, and with a hint of a grin he said, “If you don’t ask your final wish then you struck here, with the nasty head ace of yours”. I was surprised, but nonetheless, I was dead at present nothing could surprise me more. I thought for a movement, and I said, “Can I ask my life back”. He looked at me and by the looks of it, I knew the answer. Then after some time, I said, “I want to see Amour.”, He nodded his head in approval and made a swift moment by his hands towards the wall.

And there she was in our house sitting on the chair she bought, and I resented because of its hideous looks, reading one of my favorite books, which I recommended a few days back “When Breath Becomes Air”, I could suddenly relate to the author even more in the current scenario. She was brushing aside her hair from the front of her eyes, I tried calling her but I don’t think she could listen to me. I gave up and just went looking at her trying to take as much as I could. Then suddenly I discovered my phone ring, and saw Amour going to pick the phone, I yelled “Don’t Pick Up, stay here.”, I looked around and in desperate tone said, “Take me back, I don’t desire to watch”. I wanted the happy face of her to be the last of her memories. I stand up and move my hand toward him in a gesture to greet a friend, I have accepted my faith the men stood up and held my hand.

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Your's THAT Indian lady :


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Till next blog, HAPPY STEEMING
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@thenomadictales ·
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Probably one of the best reads in recent days. 

Keep writing and sharing.
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@thatindianlady ·
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Glad you liked it :):)
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@thecrytotrader ·
Waao you got this talent too,keep it up dear waiting for more posts like this :)
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@thatindianlady ·
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Hehe glad you liked it, thankyou :)
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@sad-dad ·
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Thy, my faith lies in you my girl in you
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@thatindianlady · (edited)
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Hahaha, dont you dare mocking me 😂
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