Concrete Wings: My entry for the Fractal Writing Contest #8 by breezin

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Concrete Wings: My entry for the Fractal Writing Contest #8
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#  Concrete Wings:

There’s nights and there’s days, 
there’s brought up in unguided ways.
There’s fever, there’s scars, 
at least through the windows I can still see the stars.

And in my mangled youth, 
they did proclaim,
that their concrete wings, 
would fit my back the same.

There’s life and there’s death, 
there’s “save your breath.”
There’s hope and there’s dreams, 
There’s plotted schemes.

And in-between all that the world deprives of the eye,
with my concrete wings I still tried to fly.

There’s hurt and there’s pain,
there’s **“Oh Fuck, Here I Go Again.”**
There’s words, there’s lies,
 there’s just too many alibis.

And with all the things, 
that’s left unsaid,
they furnish concrete wings,
 with polished lead.

**But Now;**
Now there’s two sets of hands, two sets of feet,
 and all together, just one heart beat.
There’s good night my Angel, 
*Don’t you cry.*
There’s should mommy sing you a lullaby?

There’s love, there’s gain,
there’s, we can start anew again.

There’s *‘mommy is trying’* 
and *‘life is tough,’*
but don’t worry baby, 
I am sure we’ll enough.

There’s “I don’t see you that much, 
and I do miss you so,
but I really need to get to work,
mommy really has to go.”
 
These fingers are worked down to bone, 
and my body bares the stings,
but it’s ok, at least I know you’ll never wear,
these horrid concrete wings.

There’s hope but there’s fear,
there’s no one near,
there’s pleas and there’s cries
and there’s “O’ Lord please tell me why’s?”</center>

And then there is the devil, 
standing at your door,
who melts your wings,
into your core.

There’s mommy will always be here, 
and mommy will catch you when you fall.
And all of a sudden, there’s my sweet, darling child, 
mommy won’t be home at all.
 
There’s soil, there’s wood, 
there’s “I’m sorry that I never could,
do all the things I haven’t done,
 that I promised you I would. 

**But Please;**
Leave the iron & stone with me, 
they were never meant for you!

**She turns around and says;**
You rest now mommy, you taught me well,
I’ll carry this thing through.
I know that you tried real hard mom,
but the wings just can’t stay here,
your wings have now become my own, 
It’s the burden I must bare.

#  If you would like to listen to this link on Dsound, Just click on the red button below.

[![Untitled.jpg](https://steemitimages.com/DQmckEcqVZcC8GqosqwDUuCkA514Tos4PFeonBMgGonZWTi/Untitled.jpg)](https://dsound.audio/#!/@breezin/20180309t142254535z-concrete-wings)

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@adeyemidrey ·
Well written and the rhyme scheme was were portray
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@breezin ·
did you click on the red button to listen? What did you think?
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@adeyemidrey ·
Nope I didn't do that
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@nyarlathotep ·
It's sad, but that's how life is; all things end and new ones begin, always.
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@breezin ·
Did you listen, or read?
Yeah, still not a very fun place to be.
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@jhoni ·
thank you for sharing friends, this can be present, @breezin, yesterday did not have time to attend because a lot of work.😊
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@breezin ·
not a problem, thatnk you @jhoni
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@rockchickjen ·
That is so beautiful @breezin! It literally brought tears to my eyes! I'm a mommy too and I know how that is. And using dSound for spoken word... brilliant! I never thought of that!
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@breezin ·
Hahaha, I am technologically un-advanced LOL I wanted to do something like this, and Dsound was the only platform I knew of - Is there another way?

Thank you so much for listening, and I am glad that it moved you, if you listen carefully towards the end you can hear me fighting back the tears, this is not the easiest journey for me, but it sure has taught me that every moment is precious and irreplaceable. - I hope it lead huge hugs for your kid/kids...
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@rockchickjen ·
I'm not too sure about another way other than making a video... and I hear those emotions come through! Amazing.
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