## Hi. I’m back on Day 71 for my 62nd Entry to the **_Steemit School Poetry 100-Day Challenge_ by @d-pend**. # I'll be glad should you be able to read and comment. # <center>Best of lucks to all contestants. ### Hatred</center> # <div class="pull-left"> http://www.bocaratontribune.com/wp-content/uploads/2017/06/hurricane.jpg [Source](http://www.bocaratontribune.com/bocaratonnews/2017/06/preparing-for-the-2017-hurricane-season/) </div> <div class="text-justify"> A traveling stream has landed to trim our days. Frost and fire fistfight, as their bodies revolve in the evil spiral. Down goes the furious whirl. Fear. # Fear the wrecked spins, the reckless Furies. Remember well your drill, my child. The chilling fright of these fiendish winds is almost here. Run. Run as fast as ever, and more in the menacing nightmare. The dice of doom roll down the angry vertigo. Anger strikes in thunder. The storm whispers a whistling howling. Titans rumor back, then retreat. King Hurricane, the left limb of wrath, grabs it all and drag it into chaos. Meanwhile, the peaceful heart, safe from dismal pulling and slapping, keeps a promise of peace. Look at me, my child. And pray. <center>http://www.saint-thomas.net/images/productions/bg/20140702_154113_hurricane_in_kansas.jpg [Source](http://www.saint-thomas.net/uk-program-71-hurricane-the-anatomy-predicting-the-unpredictable.html)</center> </div> --- #### A Personal Comment:</center> # <div class="text-justify"> This piece is a long simile, sort of an analogy between hatred and a hurricane. Images of raging winds was all I had, so I chose this latter as a motive. </div> <center>![](https://steemitimages.com/DQmZo89SroE8rmFyTA3rBeDkRAGvQ5VGAmverEoxNaGm2WG/image.png) # **Thanks for reading.** # See you tomorrow with another poem. # <center>![](https://steemitimages.com/DQmZo89SroE8rmFyTA3rBeDkRAGvQ5VGAmverEoxNaGm2WG/image.png)</center> <center>Category III</center> # [Here](https://discordapp.com/channels/415608386990768149/415608387460399116), the link to Steemit School Discord.</center>
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Creo que alcanzaste imágenes muy expresivas de esa analogía buscada, y me gustó esa tensión o contraste entre la amenaza y los efectos de la violencia, de un lado, y el ánimo y anhelo de la paz y la oración, de otro. ¡Bueno, @marlyncabrera!
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Gracias, @josemalavem. Siempre es un privilegio contar con tu lectura. Pronto publico la traducción al español; me ha costado un poco, así que la dejo descansar un rato. ¡Saludos!
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I must confess that I didn't think of hatred when reading this poem, even though the title is "hatred". After reading your final note and reading it a second time, though, everything was clear. Some images you produced are really frightening in nature, as they go deep into the darkest crannies of the human soul: hatred and fear. > A traveling stream has landed to trim our days. The thought of days getting trimmed is menacing. Harmless verbs like "trim" or "clip" show a dark connotation. > Remember well your drill, my child. This previous line convinced me you where talking about actual hurricane drills... but looking at it from the perspective of hatred-induced violence, it conveys the images of a child growing up in a perilous environment, with impending violence (perhaps domestic) always glooming... > The dice of doom roll down the angry vertigo. Like many other images you draw here, this suggest the life-changing qualities of sudden anger. It reminds me of a phrase I read somewhere: "violence is like kicking down a door that leads to the unknown". The very last part that seems to talk about the calm after the storm doesn't fall neatly into place, according to my very personal appreciation. I'm not a fan of fancy layouts and indentations either for (again, to my opinion) hinder reading. But none of this overshadows this well done piece of poetry. This poem is an exercise of language mastery and utter literary dexterity. I didn't expect less from you, my dear fellow poet Marlyn Cabrera.
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Thank you, @sansoncarrasco. I'll edit to reply properly to your comment. Something I did not include in the comments was that I had serious issues as I dealt with the identity of the speaker. I'll be back as soon as possible. Right now I'm dealing with my assignments, too ;-)
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