>Just like the movies, the lead detective flicks his cigarette symbolizing how un-rare this is for him.

Dunno but I really like this line. :) It is so classic haha. 

It might all seem long if you dared to scroll all the way down first but the parts a structured well and keep the story flowing to move into the ending which is wonderfully climatic yet serene and relatable. 

Can't say much more I liked the story and although it seemed fragmented it works, given my thoughts are anyway fragmented and it still comes together :) !tip 0.2