RE: All You see [Drop in the Ocean Topic: Perception ] by penderis

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· @penderis ·
No, I never intend to continue with stories. Too much to consider, kind of like small details

To quote and summarize from one of the comments

>A couple of experiments aided by them drugging her.
Each one changed her perception of what she had experienced.
She recalls the same experience.
With different perceptions based on the circumstances (of the experimental drugs)

The baby,eyes and smile were my way to simply explain the changes in her perception between positive and negative, I might say that the final one would be the neutral perception or generally agreed on.

As the lights dim, or the baby dies these are negative.
Friendly eyes, bright lights, baby is alive these are positive.
In the final list, I attempted a balance of both, which is a generally agreed upon reality, or perception. Sure you can still see brighter lights than others this is still your personal perception in relation to other information. It would be a warped perception I think to see a dead baby when it is instead sleeping, obviously assuming the mother is not crying or screaming. 

I hope this provides some insight into what I was thinking. I would say that answering all the comments I had to also stop and think a bit about what my intention was so sure it might not all be concrete but I feel that is why I personally enjoyed writing it this way.  Someone else could take the story and continue or even cover it in more detail to form something I could never have imagined.
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@oliviackl ·
Now i understand why you said it .
>Too much to consider, kind of like small details

You really consider a lot in this story, what message you would like to deliver and what reader imagine when they read the story. 

You always write a story with message behind it? Because as a reader, we always follow the flow of the story and seldom think of what message writer wish to deliver. But I like it to deliver message through a story, it really a new and interesting way. And I love it. But too bad, you have no intention to continue the story.
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@penderis ·
Haha, yes I considered that I had an hour to write it and how much can I avoid to put in :)

I have not really written many stories if I think quickly this would be the 3rd story but I have done a few poems which seem to be simpler if I want to avoid too many detail issues vs just conveying an idea or feeling. I might have had a bit of overlap of that into this attempt. 

I have been thinking about if I would continue it or I could put a prize up for someone to either flesh out the story or continue it in a way that explains it fully. What do you think? My concern is that something like 5 steem or so is just too little for the amount of work I think it would be or I continue it in the same fashion but shorter as prompts and have them complete that at a max of 300 - 500 words. Building the story from there....
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@oliviackl ·
I have read some writing contest where pass on the story to some writers who like to continue it. But each writer has own writing pattern, so it may end up differently. But in other way, it interesting as well. 5 Steem actually can attract of writer to continue your story if you want. Too bad, i am lousy in writing, I just love to read only. 
In another way would be as you mentioned, you can continue it slowly. Say 300-500 words per post. Then build it up chapter by chapter. Each post, you provide the link for your previous chapters. It would benefit any reader who jump into your story halfway. 

These only my 2 cents thought :p
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