RE: WE-Write! Partner Up! 12/6/2018 - by @brisby and @blueeyes8960 by theironfelix

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· @theironfelix ·
<center><i>[I shall post the same comment but in reverse order for the person who made the post. Since this is @blueeyes8690’s post I shall make my remarks to @blueeyes8690 first. But when I go to @brisby, @brisby will see hers first.]</i></center><br>
For the ending. I love how this continues where @brisby left off. The walk, the dog’s internal thoughts which displays the very rational being that dogs are and how we see the pre-teen/teen try to do things in spite of her mental condition (epilepsy). I love the boxer-centric focus even if both narrators (boxer and storyteller) are chattering at the same time. I like how the boxer has a fully developed (which is not to say the female human lacks it!) rationale as we can see it through its emotions and how it worries for the human. The companionship works well here; the pre-teen/teen wishes not to tick off her friends but the boxer doesn’t want her to suffer a fatal incident. It works well here since she doesn’t hear the rational thoughts but sees the emotional reactions to her bad choice. Good boxer-centric ending to a human-centric start @blueeyes8690.<br>
For the starter. I totally love the pre-teen/teen childhood story theme in round were it’s all boxers. I loved how you @brisby focused on the girl and her mental problems. Which is further compounded by a World that she’s very much a part off, she’s lucky to have all these things to prevent her epilepsy taking serious effect, but, in a double movement, it’s a drag for her since she can’t do anything! Also I chuckled as I cringed at her parent’s worries, happen to be at the wrong time to hear those awkward moments before me and mój towarzysze (my comrades) could go. Anyways, I like how the human and boxer protag are allowed to exist and move on beyond the traumas that hold them back constantly, indirectly and directly. Good starter @brisby.<br>
I would be honoured to make a start or end for either of ye two for the next round. But I prefer a starter for I got a few good ideas for a boxer. Just ring me up next time. ~UwU~<br>
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@blueeyes8960 ·
Thanks for that great intuitive comment @theironfelix.  I love how you delve into the stories and provide insights.  One can tell that you don't just glance through the writings and click the vote button.  It's very helpful to me especially being so new to this.  And I'd be honored to partner up with you anytime on a we-write!
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@theironfelix ·
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