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Would you do me a huge favor? There is something wrong with the verb tenses in this paragraph and I can't figure out what it is. I know I used the past perfect tense incorrectly -EGADS! - but I can't quite figure out why or how to better put this and it irks me. >The third blast of wind blew open a bedside book that I had bought a few months earlier. I found the beautiful book in a used bookshop and instantly knew it was destined for him. The book was written in Arabic and he could not read it, but he spent many hours with it in his still strong hands, turning page after page from left to right, spellbound.
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It might be 'more correct' to clutter it with had + verb, e.g., he "had spent many hours" and all that, but why clutter the prose? To me it's readable as is. And my degree was in English teaching. But when I read novels where all the sentences are grammatically correct to the point of verbosity, I be like "Bring on the frags, the comma splices, the conjunctions, the slang." If there's something wrong with your verb tenses here, I don't even care to know what would make them "right."
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I spent probably an hour writing those two sentences and they still bug me today. But thanks for giving it a look! I gotta get to yours. I had no time to read the entries today. Maybe tomorrow.
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After reading too much "pedestrian prose," all grammatically correct, I grew annoyed with pedantic sounding narratives. I love Churchill's view of the taboo on ending sentences with a preposition: "That's a rule up with which I will not put."
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