Thanks for your feedback, it's always appreciated :)

I have to admit, there are a lot of strong characters in this scene and it's difficult to split the work down into manageable chunks to share on Steemit. When the book was published in 2010 I was a very new writer and I would probably slow down the pace if I were to re-write it now.

I think it works better in the full novel because there's a big scene to read through rather than this small sample to try to get to grips with all the characters in one go. Believe me, it's worth it :)